It's not really winter here...

[Hurst]

Breath on frosted glass.
Window sweating. Fingertip
writes a naughty word.

[arbil_poieo]

I kinda want to know what the naughty word is.

I like the image of a window sweating and the naughty word bit because it made my mind wander a little. Really good read.

[Hurst]

"I kinda want to know what the naughty word is."

Want me to tell you, or leave it to your imagination?

[arbil_poieo]

I've already imagined it all, so telling me would just ruin it.

[Hurst]

Plus, everything's always better when left to the imagination, right?

[brandontoh]

It's 'word' in comic sans.

[Hurst]

It's 'word' in comic sans.

Like I said, I'm not saying anything.

[AspiringWordWeaver]

Sends the imagination in a direction without too much direction (and with humor). On the first reading, I somehow missed the title. After reading the title I liked this even more.

[Hurst]

Sends the imagination in a direction without too much direction (and with humor). On the first reading, I somehow missed the title. After reading the title I liked this even more.

Aww, thanks. I needed that today.

[billy]

Breath on frosted glass.
Window sweating. Fingertip
writes a naughty word.

it makes a good senryu,
i'm not sure you need finge and you def don't need a period in any line of haiku or senryuthe last line is excellent and adds lots to such a short poem. don't overly worry about sylable counting as they're really just a guide.

[newsclippings]

ooooooooo this is nice.

I once tried to write something like this.
I failed.

Nicely done!

[Hurst]

Breath on frosted glass.
Window sweating. Fingertip
writes a naughty word.

it makes a good senryu,
i'm not sure you need finge and you def don't need a period in any line of haiku or senryuthe last line is excellent and adds lots to such a short poem. don't overly worry about sylable counting as they're really just a guide.

So the syllables don't matter that much? Is it just a shorter line, followed by a longer line, then another shorter one? I think I like the word 'fingertip' because of the crisp sound in 'tip', reminding me of the preciseness of the finger itself.
Thanks for the reply.

-Hurst

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ooooooooo this is nice.

I once tried to write something like this.
I failed.

Nicely done!

Thanks for the compliment. I'm sure you wrote something better on another topic.

-Hurst