Housecat

[kamirakara]

This is a poem for a little collection I'm working on, Metazoa (:

I don't care if you say you love me
Take care of me, but let me be free
Fresh water, food in my bowl,
I am someone you cannot control

That is all I want from you
Satisfied I'll forever be true
But neglect me, and I'll be on my way
To find myself a better place to stay

Link to Metazoa: http://kamirakara.deviantart.com/gallery/40466562

[billy]

hi kamirakara, you can put your page/site url in your signature. if you need help ask a mod.
it makes it easier to spot spam.

it's a very cat poem. if i had a suggestion to make it would be that the poem feels too wordy.

[aaron]

the first line reminds me of "break down" by tom petty. the second line is the only one that kinda gives a hint towards the speaker being an animal. the rest personifies the speaker. verry cool, i would agree with billy tho i feel like you could get your point across with fewer words. thanx for the read!