In the blink of an eye

[Keith]

Mum, hear me cry.
Mum, watch me smile.
Mum, here’s my first step.
Mum, hold my hand.

Mum, dad won’t let me win.
Mum, were do the stars go in the day.
Mum, will you tell dad.
Mum, why is the sea salty.

Mum, are we there yet.
Mum, I’m bored.
Mum, can we go now.
Muuum, shut up.

Mum, what’s for tea.
Mum, is my shirt ironed.
Mum, can I have a lift.
Mum, can I have some money.

Mum, let me carry your bags.
Mum, do you want a cup of tea.
Mum, how’s your day been.
Mum, I love you.

[Todd]

Good title...the entire sweep of it does seem this fast. I could put age ranges to each of these.

[billy]

Mum, hear me cry
Mum, watch me smile
Mum, here’s my first step
Mum, hold my hand

Mum, dad won’t let me win
Mum, were do the stars go, in the day is the 2nd comma needed?
Mum, will you tell dad
Mum, why is the sea salty

Mum, are we there yet
Mum, I’m bored
Mum, can we go now
Muuum, shut up

Mum, what’s for tea
Mum, is my shirt ironed
Mum, can I have a lift
Mum, can I have some money

Mum, let me carry your bags
Mum, do you want a cup of tea
Mum, how’s your day been
Mum, I love you

a journey through life. the last stanza was almost beautiful. so much to like, the pride of childhood, the love of an adult child, and everything in between. my only nit is nothing really, though i think if you're using grammar you should use periods.

the last line is as cliche as any cliche could be but it's perfect for the poem.

thanks for the read

[addy]

Such a sweet piece. I also liked the passage of time (god that third stanza . Kids could be so rotten).

[Keith]

Thanks for your comments, Life does indeed slip by fast and children press fast forward but wouldn't be without them