I think therefore I am

[Thomas.c.Batten]

I sat out of mind, thinking
I am, I think, who am I?
Next to the fire embers burning,
Burning
In the cold dark days of November.
Out of my mind questioning,
Nobody but my self,
Thinking I am, I think, who am I?

I think I am this, I conclude,
But they think I am that.
What am I?
I am he, who does not know,
I am thinking,
I think therefore nothing is certain,
Not even this,
Can ever be certain.

[billy]

poems like this are tricky things for me to give feedback, on

on the one hand i see them as being clever and on the other i see them as being too clever by half.

I sat out of mind, thinking good solid opening line. it's different and makes me think straight away.
I am, I think, who am I?
Next to the fire embers burning,
Burning i also like the repetition of burning, it has a dark poe like feel.
In the cold dark days of November. cliche (the cold dark part)
Out of my mind questioning, cliche
Nobody but my self,
Thinking I am, I think, who am I?

I think I am this, I conclude, is I conclude, needed?
But they think I am that.
What am I?
I am he, who does not know,
I am thinking,
I think therefore nothing is certain,
Not even this,
Can ever be certain.

i really think it has a lot of potential
thanks for the read.

[Thomas.c.Batten]

Thanks Billy for suggestions, revised edition is below, i feel 'questioning' is significant to the poem so will keep it, but have removed the full stop, to let it flow on to the next line.

I think therefore I am

I sat out of mind, thinking
I am, I think, who am I?
Next to the fire embers burning,
Burning
In the biting cold of November.
Out of my mind, questioning
Nobody, but my self,
Thinking I am, I think, who am I?

I think I am this,
But they think I am that
What am I?
I am he, who does not know,
I am thinking,
I think therefore nothing is certain
Not even this,
Can ever be certain.