Voices Reign.

[Mr. Brown]

Voices Reign,
Tall
Short
Skinny
Fat
Ugly
Unwanted,
She stands alone.
In a mirror,
She sees beauty.
Here and now,
She doesn't imagine the coke-bottle waist only attainable by purchase of the latest Barbie.
She sees beauty.
Colors like the sun and the moon,
The vast oceans to the unfathomable skies.
Here in the mirror, she sees beauty.
Until she opens her eyes,
And voices reign.

[billy]

Voices Reign,
Tall
Short
Skinny
Fat
Ugly
Unwanted,
She stands alone.
In a mirror,
She sees beauty.
Here and now,
She doesn't imagine the coke-bottle waist only attainable by purchase of the latest Barbie. not sure the barbie part of this line works
She sees beauty.
Colors like the sun and the moon,
The vast oceans to the unfathomable skies.
Here in the mirror, she sees beauty.
Until she opens her eyes,
And voices reign.

i think it would be a lot more powerful if you removed most of the early single word lines. or just have one line with all the words on to create a crowded effect.

[addy]

I like billy's suggestion. In its current format, the enumeration delays the point of the piece. We needed to get to the part about the mirror to contextualize the scene, yet the way its written now that's halfway into the poem already. I'd also prefer less repetition of the word beauty. For example, if you say "she sees colors like the sun and the moon", I think its clear already that she's looking at something beautiful

Thanks for the read