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09-28-2012, 09:43 AM
summer orchards
honey bees in cherry blossom-
need more cupboard space
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09-28-2012, 10:53 PM
The best way to comment about this style poem is simply to say something like, Nature makes me hungry, or at least my mind can make my drives sound pleasant.
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09-29-2012, 08:50 AM
Mmmmm Smile
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09-30-2012, 10:21 AM (This post was last modified: 09-30-2012, 10:23 AM by billy.)
(09-28-2012, 10:53 PM)rowens Wrote:  The best way to comment about this style poem is simply to say something like, Nature makes me hungry, or at least my mind can make my drives sound pleasant.
mostly people just look and leave Big Grin
(09-29-2012, 08:50 AM)addy Wrote:  Mmmmm Smile
i take it you like sweet things Smile thanks for the Mmmmm Smile
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09-30-2012, 10:42 AM
"mostly people just look and leave"

Is that a suggestion?
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09-30-2012, 11:34 AM
certainly not, that's something we're not too keen on :Big Grin feedback is the thing that makes the site work Smile
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09-30-2012, 02:48 PM
Raw honey is a personal favorite. Nicely written, Billy, but you're making me long for Spring when I'm just settling in to Autumn!
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10-08-2012, 10:56 AM
as long have you longing who cares the season Big Grin Blush
thanks for the kind words Aish
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10-22-2012, 10:38 PM
(09-28-2012, 09:43 AM)billy Wrote:  summer orchards
honey bees in cherry blossom-
need more cupboard space

Nice haiku. Thanks for sharing.
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10-23-2012, 06:55 AM
can i asked what it was you liked about it Smile
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10-23-2012, 10:19 AM
(09-28-2012, 09:43 AM)billy Wrote:  summer orchards
honey bees in cherry blossom-
need more cupboard space

Makes me think of lazy days, sun bathing in back gardens with all the house doors open, I can see the cupboard but its not mine, more of a country kitchen.
Thanks Billy
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10-23-2012, 01:31 PM (This post was last modified: 10-23-2012, 01:31 PM by billy.)
thanks for the feedback TOMH. Smile
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11-11-2012, 12:54 AM
This works for me and bring all sorts of possitive thoughts to mind.... orchards stocked with honey bees, a love of honey....and a bit of a thing for jam making! condensed feel good factor. Home.
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