The Ghost Fruit Trees, Toward the End by crow
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The Ghost Fruit

The ghost fruit keeps its secrets. Ebon pits,
big as your fist, litter the ground, picked
clean by starburst wrens, skittering
around. Some seeds three years old. Lit
from behind, their blue germs still shimmer:
lively, tiny, doomed. Soon, none will exist.
one shrinking copse, by a waterfall, persists.
Once, ten-thousand spawning behemoths trenched

the river soil. Black-skinned eggs and black-
shelled pits alike they tucked into the brack,
then broody laid until the glowing sprouts
lead the hatchlings up and out, which browsed
the stems until they glowed, and soldiered off
the waterfall into the sea, camouflaged as stars.

Now, one last sad-eyed giant, trumpeting,
forlorn, finally tired, finally
too old, to keep the mound warm enough . . .

She tries. She tries so hard before she dies.



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#2
a worthy choice, it was one of those rare poems that grabs the reader as soon as they look at it.
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#3
The sonics throughout were excellent and the ghost fruit is instantly impactful. I have seen quite a bit of promising work from you recently so it is great to see you bringing it to the next level like this. Well done!
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#4
What a heartbreaking, perfect little poem. I thought of dinosaurs. The end tore me apart after the second read.
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#5
Yes. Thank you.
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#6
It has a magical quality about it. The poem actually makes me empathize with dinosaurs. It is a very special poem.
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#7
I always meant to come back to this poem as its hard to read without your mind wandering within its lines, well done Crow

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#8
Nice work Crow, congratulations on the spotlight./Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
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#9
Every once in awhile life conspires to keep me away from the site, and I miss poems like this.

Gorgeous work Crow!

This was a well deserved spotlight.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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