The Big November by only rob

[Leanne]

When I draw my shades
the birds stop
the sky
the laughing children
the woman in the sun dress
backlit
a walking hymn

but I can’t see her limbs
grow away
or the butterflies

fall.







the original thread can be found here

[Todd]

I really liked this one. It sort of reminded me of one I'd read by Ted Kooser. I really like the idea of her limbs growing away.

[rayheinrich]

wow, straight out zen water this one!

[Leanne]

Isn't it gorgeous? Some poems just stay with you.

[rayheinrich]

yeah, when i read ones like this it makes me wonder why i keep
bothering with all those extra words...

[Leanne]

extra words need homes too

you're too damn compassionate

[rayheinrich]

they seem so pitiful, all of them, so yes, i take them in.
but, truth be known, i'm not that nice, i need to USE them.
(it's only later, when i hear cackles, that i realize they use[d] me.)

[Leanne]

words'll do that

meanwhile, back at the poem, here's me hoping that rob comes back and gives us more

[rayheinrich]

The Big November           by only rob

When I draw my shades
the birds stop
the sky
the laughing children
the woman in the sun dress
backlit
a walking hymn

but I can’t see her limbs
grow away
or the butterflies

fall.




the original thread can be found here

rob come back, rob us again

[Leanne]

it deserved to be biggened

[ChristopherSea]

Interesting choice. The title grabbed me, as did the final drop with 'fall'.

[surdemitriad]

did you actually mean “see her limbs grow away”. or did you mean you cant truthfully make out where she was going or what she was so you want her too grow away..