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Cacao yields the perfect spark
for poets smothered head to toe
in decadence so rich and dark.
A biscuit might seem bland and stark,
prosaic, but the masters know:
cacao yields the perfect spark.
No errant crumb, no chance remark
will lose its way, now covered so
in decadence so rich and dark.
We know the truth, this poets’ lark
demands indulgence; apropos,
cacao yields the perfect spark.
The wait is long to make your mark,
but research (still to come) will show
cacao yields the perfect spark,
in decadence so rich and dark.
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Ah!
Such stuff as dreams are made on. (And chocolate's pretty damn good too.)
Yeah, well, yet even more of my taste (I find out yet again [again])
is based on the ignorance of prejudice. After reading a few (probably
poorly constructed but good enough to fool me) villanelles over on
"Tilt-a-Whirl" I began to doubt, and then this fine chocolate truffle
finally finishes me. I pledge I shall never make fun of villanelles in
general ever again. It shall only be a specific one, and only after
checking with you first. When done this way they're beautiful.
In this life, why do I have to keep learning over and over that if I
don't like something it's probably not because I don't like it but
because it isn't what it is supposed to be? (Except for haggis.)
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions
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I like haggis, but not chocolate haggis.
The thing about form poetry is, a lot of writers pay way too much attention to dotting eyeballs and crossing t-shirts without every figuring out why they're being asked to do it that way in the first place. No poem is going to be comfortable if it's starched and stuffed into entirely the wrong suit.
Don't blame the form, blame the person who's doing such terrible things with it. And then have more chocolate.
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Don't blame the song for someone singing it off pitch, some people just have no ear for music? Leanne definitely has a touch with the villanelle, but that's mostly because she is touched. However, I still maintain that if the French had anything to do with it, it is probably corrupt. Just because Leanne can conjure a purse out of a sows ear, makes it no less a sows ear.
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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Come now, I've read some godawful sonnets and the French barely touched those!
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Whaddaya mean? The court of the Norman French crapped all over those. Why do you think it is so difficult to write a sonnet without sounding like you stepped off into Yoda-speech for a line or two? Of course I don't doubt you have read some godawful sonnets, but then again how many people is one likely to run across that even knows what a sonnet is supposed to look like? These days if the line has 10 syllables to it, that's good enough. Matters not that there are only three stresses in the whole bloody line because "It's got ten syllables!". Or so I have been condescendingly told by these pseudo-poets who think that is what iambic pentameter is. Heaven forbid should they ever try to write in iambs, it might stop your heart! To tell the truth, I suspect the majority are of French descent. I mean what do you expect from a people whose language allows a five syllable word to be pronounced "Blauh!".
Besides, I don't need to have seen it rain, to deduce that it did, when I step into a puddle, and there are an awful lot of French puddles in English, language as well as poetry.
Dale
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the above i find to be true, i was only recently that i found out how to use meter (almost)
but the poem, how sweet mmmmmmmmmmm
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and yet, you can still manage to turn out a reasonably decent villanelle if you put your mind to it... and so can anyone
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yes, that's because like i said, i just recently learned about meter (almost.)
for which i have you to thank....thanks
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02-09-2012, 07:30 PM
(This post was last modified: 02-09-2012, 07:31 PM by Leanne.)
oh please...
The only way to prove that villanelles are basically a good form is to write good villanelles. This isn't one. It was fun nonetheless, and that it's been enjoyed is good enough for me.
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it was good dammit 
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