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[rayheinrich]

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            a lot of people ask for coffee
            
            and a little kiss in the morning
            
            using only the words they need
            
            but poets
            
            (and you've guessed it by now)
            
            kill for the pleasure of it
            
                      - - -



No uncreative, dullard remarks should follow.
Get off your ass and write something creative.
.

[Leanne]

verbal bondage
requires no safe word

participants should begin
already flayed, as skin
has no part to play

held still by the
thrill of striking
poesy

all poets are flaccid
when gagged

and no poem
is worth


going without coffee

[tectak]

verbal bondagetied up in"nots"
requires no safe wordthis may be lost on some but not on me.Mine is "jettison". Discuss.

participants should begin
already flayed, as skin
has no part to playfine stanza but leaves the metaphor in s1 somewhat diminished. Flayed? And no safe word screamed out?

held still by the
thrill of striking
poesyooooo! You are risqué

all poets are flaccid ALL poets. Surely you are not that promiscuous.....excellent word choice,though.
when gagged

and no poem
is worth


going without coffeeor a fag afterwards. Am I reading this wrong?

Yes.
Best,
Tectak

[Leanne]

Ah, but to be a poet you must begin flayed... for as Kierkegaard said (to paraphrase slightly because my memory is not what google wants it to be ):

What is a poet? An unhappy being whose heart is torn by secret sufferings, but whose lips are so strangely formed that when the sighs and cries escape them, they sound like beautiful music. The people crowd around the poet and say to him: "Sing for us again soon"; that is as much as to say: "May new sufferings torment your soul."

But flayed, flaccid or febrile, we must not be caffiene free -- life is just too short

[Erthona]

I prefer ant feta mines! Cuts out the middle man.

[tectak]

verbal bondagetied up in"nots"
requires no safe wordthis may be lost on some but not on me.Mine is "jettison". Discuss.

participants should begin
already flayed, as skin
has no part to playfine stanza but leaves the metaphor in s1 somewhat diminished. Flayed? And no safe word screamed out?

held still by the
thrill of striking
poesyooooo! You are risqué

all poets are flaccid ALL poets. Surely you are not that promiscuous.....excellent word choice,though.
when gagged

and no poem
is worth


going without coffeeor a fag afterwards. Am I reading this wrong?

Yes.
Best,
Tectak

Bugger. I am not sure who I am writing this critique for any more. Sorry rayheinrich if you have had your pice hijacked. I will get back.
Best,
Tectak

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                < gratuitous wordage >
            
            a lot of people ask for coffee
            
            and a little kiss in the morning
            
            using only the words they need
            
            but poets
            
            (and you've guessed it by now)
            
            kill for the pleasure of it
            
                      - - -



No uncreative, dullard remarks should follow.
Get off your ass and write something creative.
.
Phew. That's alright then.
Tectak

[Wildcard]

If this were in the Sewer I would think that Leanne is trolling for poesy

All The New Folks

'Folks' isn't a real
poetry word, I guess.
Then again, I
am not a real poet.
And all my folks
live in my computer
on my desk
in my bedroom.

I take my folks to work
and hide them from my boss.
Sometimes in the bathroom
I put them in my pocket
or not.

I'm careful
not to flush my folks.

All of my folks are smart-
er than me. This does-
n't get me pissed.

Real people are an option
I only choose
for dear friends
and money.

Real people scream,
but folks only type
and you can turn those fuckers off.

[rayheinrich]

Tectak:
My fault really, as I've gotten a bit too creative with my
"alternate rules" requests and have turned them into
code (or, at least, cipher).

The forum rules allow a thread originator to free up the
response rules in the the "fun" and "misc" categories
(but not in any of the critique ones).

I should have used the unofficial official phrase:
"Free-Ranging Allowed, Creative Responses Encouraged"

Mad Ray