***(i am dreaming)

[bogpan]

i am dreaming
but someone is laying bricks
around my dream
wells
he is rising houses
drawing roads and people
unfolding some wind
above plane-trees
and above hills rounded

and bridges
to other dreams

[Aish]

This is thought provoking. It has the concrete details of sprawl, which is vaguely sinister to my sensibilities, and yet some would say necessary. It also hints a bit toward more spiritual creation. There is an interesting tandem here, of gossamer dreams and concrete physicality.
I am still enjoying muddling this over, it lingers. Nice job.

'wells' seems to be a bit out of place where it is, although I understand it as a necessity. 'rising houses' should be 'raising houses'.

[Ca ne fait rien]

This reminded me of the CP Cavafy poem 'Walls'. However I liked the hope in your poem- no matter how high the walls around dreams, they can be used as bridges to other and maybe better dreams.

[billy]

i like this, a few syntax problems, 'wells' is left out there on it's own and it should be 'raising' not rising, love the 6th line. should it be 'plain trees'.
the last two lines are very poignant comparing dreams.
thanks for the read

[bogpan]

should it be 'plain trees'.

Hello, Billy. I want to make a clarification (very fast) on the plane-tree. It's a bot. plane-tree, plane, platan (Platanus orientalis). Later I will answer in detail. Thanks for your opinion.>: D <
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Platanus

[addy]

I love this. As the others have pointed out, the solid and concrete-sounding imagery was refreshing change in a poem about dreams (where usually impressions, emotions, and fluid imagery like "water" abound). I love the trees, and the way you phrased hills rounded.

Most of the grammar issues have been pointed out... I think "unfolding some wind" should just be "unfolding wind" though.

Thanks for the read.