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a haiku

a haiku
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#1
08-19-2011, 09:46 AM


my car won't start up.
i think it's tank needs filling
i like filling things
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08-23-2011, 07:59 AM
With piss!!! Hysterical
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08-23-2011, 10:23 AM (This post was last modified: 08-23-2011, 10:27 AM by billy.)
actually with meat but you still win a prize Hysterical
looking at the thing in hindsight, it reads more of a senryu than a haiku.
and you're supposed to be helping me out as it's in the novice section.
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08-23-2011, 04:28 PM
But, you're BILLY - I thought it was a dummy piece. Besides, we're supposed to be nice to the novices. Smile
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