Six After Sexty

[ICSoria]

Not quite there…yet.

These days, my mind seems in a knot,
can't seem to understand just what
it was that used to turn me on--
the impetus seems all but gone.

I sit beside my sunlit shore
not knowing what I'm looking for
and wonder: If some lovely lass
fell in my lap--despite bronze bun

within my grasp, and cleavage firm
enough to make a young man squirm--
would I feel somewhat put upon
and ask her to just...move along?
…damn, I trust not!

ICSoria
©2011

[heslopian]

The title reminds me of when I went on holidays with the Boy's Brigade and the kids from our group would tease the Scottish kids by making them say "six," which sounds like "sex" in the accent
Should "bun" be plural in the last line of the penultimate verse?
A very funny poem ICSoria. Mixing phrases like "sunlit shore" with lines about geriatric sex is genius

[ICSoria]

Should "bun" be plural in the last line of the penultimate verse?
A very funny poem ICSoria. Mixing phrases like "sunlit shore" with lines about geriatric sex is genius

That also brings to mind a Seinfeld episode, where Jerry was dating a deaf lady who read lips. While dropping her off at her house, he wondered what time he should pick her up for the next date and asked her, "How about six?" She rushed out of his car, slammed the door and he was left wondering what he did wrong.
Around here, bun is a more direct euphemism for ass...at least as I heard it expressed in some humorous settings. BTW: I have no problem using the more direct approach, i.e. vulgar. In fact I am often known to be quite...direct in my own speech. I just feel that in light poetry, euphemisms can add to the humor.

Sid

[billy]

nice meter sid

age has a wicked sense of humour

[Leanne]

I certainly appreciate the rhyming of lass and bun Subverting expectations is part of a good poet's job description.

Damn those buxom view blockers... this is wonderfully done, right from the title to the curmudgeonly ending.

[ICSoria]

Damn those buxom view blockers...

Yeah, thankfully, however, I can still appreciate having my view of a flat, blue sea blocked by firm, bronze...um, cleavage.

Sid

[billy]

i could appreciate having any view blocked by such visions