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The best book
Written long ago
In the sunny Middle East.
I read it attentively.
Then
Carefully
I felt my throat ...
The author -
He was not pacifist.
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hehe,
i love how you put some of your pieces together RY
i think this is a very publishable poem
the whit in the last three lines is solid and understated.
excellent
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Instead of "wrote", perhaps "written" would work better... but that's all I've got

The last couple of lines gave me a goosebump or two, very effective.
It could be worse
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Hi, dear lady!
Yes, you are right!
Thank you!
R.Y.
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It's got a fantastic bite to it, like most of your work. Love this one.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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