My bollocks theory

[violet]

Your better off staying at home, Sitting on your favorite chair,
sipping on a nice glass of Stella or whatever takes your fancy
reading the latest edition of OK! where you will have the immense pleasure
of seeing people whoring themselves for slogans and columns.
Read the grotesque views on teenage society and how that 12 year old kid
thought she was going to the toilet to take a shit, only to find
that the very painful 'shit' had a cry that could wake her dead grandma
and happened to have legs.

Whatever integrity we once had, is now bumper-stickered, badged,
laid across a fake setting with very nice fake tits and legs spread wide,
left lying around for your kids to see and inevitably imitate.

It really makes no difference if you care or not, kids will still fuck kids
then have kids who will also have more kids and blah, blah, blah.
There will still always be the girl sitting outside Burger King,
obviously junked up to her eyeballs on heroin from an infested needle
looking for some change for the burger she is never going to buy.
Guys will still trawl the streets looking for a disease with a short skirt
and a filthy mouth who doesn't cost too much per hour.
All the while, passing AIDS back and forth like it's a 12-piece-chicken
family meal from KFC.

When the STD ridden demise of the human pest comes,
quite frankly, I would much rather stay at home and spend it with my beer.

[billy]

i'm crap at commenting on prose. but , and for me this is a big but.

the above for me makes a great prose poem.
in fact i think it would make an excellent prose poem.
personally i'd look o this as the best piece of yours i've seen and read so far.
lots of originality that gives an in depth look at the so called sexual revolution of
today. notice how there's no forced poetics fucking it up. it's all clear and plain and to some extent passionate. (not in a sexual way ).

All the while, passing AIDS back and forth like it's a three-piece-chicken
family meal from KFC. i love this line though 12 or 16 might be better than 3 if it's to be passed around, and bucket instead of meal.

seriously violet. try and make your poetry more like this and less like a hall mark poem and you'll see your poetry improve exponentially.
of course i could be wrong because this is JMO, but i doubt it.

excellent.
thanks for the read.

[violet]

i completely agree with the 3 piece part.. i never really noticed that before, thank you so much for your suggestion and for the kind words