"Bridge."
#1
In my dreams I see a boiling river
And a wobbly bridge across it.
I can't go over this bridge
To the other river bank.
The birds,
With eyes like the light bulbs,
Fly menacingly above it.
I look onto the river, bridge and flock.
There are not any emotions. I know.
My day awaits me.
I'll go over this bridge.
But somebody would think:
Another fearsome bird
Flies to the other side.
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#2
Nice nightmarish vibe to this. Love that ending, that flips the narrator from bystander to something else. Thanks for the read Smile
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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#3
Thank you so much, Addy!
R.Y.
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#4
I love the abrupt end. Also the image of a boiling river is quite a terrifying one!
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#5
Thank you so much!
R.Y.
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