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Sunday noon.
Cafeteria. Window.
Young women pass by.
They have such wonderful
And such useless buttocks ...
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Cynical indeed, I imagine those women are quite attached to their buttocks

I really love the sparsity of this poem, with the staccato first lines building to a longer, more lyrical... anticlimax.
One passing thought, and it's by no means a criticism -- have you perhaps considered putting (and such useless) in parentheses?
It could be worse
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Hi!
Thank you so much, dear lady, for your very kind comment!
About your question - yep, I'm clueless ... sorry ... Never think on it? Ha-ha! Yes!
Thanks a lot, once more!
R.Y.