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"Her palm-lines, perfect vicennial
place-settings."
Deadened angels aline the sky,
languid grey flames lax into sub-
mission.
Eyes set upwards but tethered
closed, otherwordly seams with
great kansas wire.
Throats aglow with centennial
be-gunnings.
In perfect unison - we need not
feel lonely.
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will reply to this tomorrow jadie, just got guests.
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Alrighty.
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(05-24-2011, 04:40 PM)jadielue Wrote: "Her palm-lines, perfect vicennial
place-settings." i love how this verse tells us her age in a unique way,
Deadened angels aline the sky,
languid grey flames lax into sub-
mission.
Eyes set upwards but tethered
closed, otherwordly seams with
great kansas wire.
Throats aglow with centennial
be-gunnings.
In perfect unison - we need not
feel lonely.
for me the poem is obviously about the fallen, at first i thought be- gunnings was a spelling mistake bit i realised it's to mark the cannon or rifle fire of a gun salute. and also the start of lives lost which this poem salutes.
an excellent memorial day poem jadie, about (i think) a young woman's thoughts on remembering a lost love one, maybe a father or brother. (the woman, being the 1st person in the poem and not necessarily the poet.
thanks for the read, jmo.
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Oh, Billy! I love your take on this poem and how beautiful you made it seem. You certainly can see the best in everything.
Thanks so much.
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actually i often get it wrong, lol. as for the poem, it was very poignant writ. and though at first glance seemed hard to break down, felt like it was something i'd always understood. (it doesn't happen that often to me or for me
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Beautiful piece Jade, just wow beautiful. Thank you for this.
fd
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Thank you, fd.
