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eastern fireworks
aimed at crescent moon
mandarins plot
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#2
Hi, Billy!
Sounds very funny for the firs glance. But there is something weird behind lines.
Great work, indeed!
Impressed!
R.Y.
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(05-21-2011, 07:58 PM)billy Wrote:  eastern fireworks
aimed at crescent moon
mandarins plot

I liked the carefully selected words to tell a good story with good descriptions and attention to detail, nice work!
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(05-21-2011, 07:58 PM)billy Wrote:  eastern fireworks
aimed at crescent moon
mandarins plot

This is excellent Billy, China asked to help end Syrian conflict, deft and subtle behind the images. I would change the title though, its too obvious. How about, Help wanted or A cry for help or crying conflict or something like that.

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'mandarins nod off' may be more apropos. Cool poem billy! That sleepy giant is always napping, but we are thankful for their invention of gun powder, noodles and one from column A...
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
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Shouldn't that be "western" fireworks aimed at crescent moon, as it seems as though it is the US who is doing the aiming?

I do like "mandarins plot". A very succinct image.

Dale
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