Chism

[jadielue]

Young, breathless children
adorned with gun-powder
burns.

This perceived civil war
where limits were endless
and widows were made.

We still wear sackcloth
and grovel though.


"They say that God would visit
Adam in the cool of the night.
Here, it's never been colder."

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Note: the whole bit where little quotes in the beginning and little quotes in the end are put in some of my poems is just a little thing that only I, as far as I know, do. For me it works.

[addy]

Young, breathless children
adorned with gun-powder
burns. Great image, skillfully used.

This perceived civil war Just a very minor nit... why "perceived"?
where limits were endless
and widows were made.

We still wear sackcloth
and grovel though.


"They say that God would visit
Adam in the cool of the night.
Here, it's never been colder."

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I love this

Thanks for the wonderful read jadielue

[jadielue]

Addy, think about it, how is a war EVER civil? Haha, those two words have tickled me blue since kindergarten. Thank you, glad you liked it.

[addy]

Addy, think about it, how is a war EVER civil? Haha, those two words have tickled me blue since kindergarten. Thank you, glad you liked it.

Oh, civil war! I read it as "civil war" (like the war within a country) *is stupid*

LOL

[jadielue]

Haha, no problem really.