Pictures of the Dead Poets

[heslopian]

I wonder how different her pictures would seem
if Sylvia Plath wore bunny ears,
or maybe a fake moustache
above her spinster’s blouse in them, her smile
like a stretching rack, below cavernous eyes
which flirt with torment, while waxy synthetic hairs
obscure her upper lip.

Likewise, would John Berryman’s gaze have been less intense
if he dressed like Carmen Miranda,
his Deidre Barlow spectacles conveying the words
“I’ve felt pain you can’t dream of”
as apples and pears jostled on his skull.

Perhaps Anne Sexton might have seemed jollier if,
upon emerging from the bowl her face fell into
at the dinner table, after she’d drunk herself silly,
a mashed potato Hilterstache –
No, now we’re just being absurd.

[billy]

this is good enough without pictures jack though
i can see that if you shaved berryman he would look a lot like carmen

i keep faltering on this line;
above her spinster’s blouse in them, her smile

for me it feels in need of some grammar somewhere though i'm not a grammar expert hehe.

other than that i thik it excels. not sure if deirdries specs are universal enough for many readers to understand but i do,

thanks for the read.

[heslopian]

I think it might be the "in them" which is throwing you off. It does me as well. Do you think it would it work better if I removed them? Yeah I worried about Deidre's specs too. I might change it to something like "grandmother's". Thanks for the kind words and feedback Billy.

[billy]

I think it might be the "in them" which is throwing you off. It does me as well. Do you think it would it work better if I removed them? Yeah I worried about Deidre's specs too. I might change it to something like "grandmother's". Thanks for the kind words and feedback Billy.

woody allen comes to mind for the specs as he's a universal twat.
or buddy holly, or someone else jmo

for me it would be better without the them but of course use your own council

[heslopian]

Woody Allen's a good idea, though I happen to think he's one of the best filmmakers of our time