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"A happy afterlife."

"A happy afterlife."
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#1
02-25-2011, 12:18 AM
A mossy stump
Sees itself in its dreams
A green young tree.

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#2
02-26-2011, 03:47 PM
nicely done ris
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#3
03-02-2011, 06:27 PM
This is one of my favourites by you. I love how you convey a world of messages through such short, staccato lines.
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#4
03-09-2011, 06:24 PM
Well done and Thank you.
It felt full of encouragement.
You give to the world when you're giving your best to somebody else.
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#5
03-31-2011, 01:22 PM
It's a one-syllable short haiku, and it's nice. My reply:

A young sapling
growing near a stump
gasps from the breadth
"If you let the sound you guide, grate sour on your soul,
you pass right back your parking pass, and drive right past your goal." from Life: the Utmost Clarity
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#6
03-31-2011, 02:18 PM
Hi, friends, thanks for reading and comments!
Verbavore - yep, very good! I like it!
R.Y.
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