"To run to an extreme."
#1
You are beautiful
In your swiftness.
Your lovely piercing
Scream "Oh, my!"
Covered me in
Goose skin ...
A cockroach.
The little cockroach
That I put on your
Naked belly ...
It shows how little
You need for a full excitement.
It explains
Why do I adore an extreme
Love with you!

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#2
i like the images in it ris.
though i think i'd scream as well Smile
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#3
Thank you Billy!
I think me too! Ha-ha!
R.Y.
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#4
A fine thriller of a piece; just a couple of grammatical stuff that can be polished ("... need for a full excitement" doesn't quite read right) but other lines made me literally hold my breath. They were that good
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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