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"Rings."
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03-28-2011, 03:29 AM
Oh how different
Can be rings - For many purposes And places. The same way How different Can be faces. What strikes My mind? Alikeness. They are all empty. All. Inside. 
03-28-2011, 07:42 AM
Can do with a bit of polish grammar-wise but wow... this has got a great core. I just love what this piece is saying. Those last few lines are just haunting.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
03-29-2011, 01:39 PM
I really like how you turn how different a circle can be drawn to how different people can look, and then twist it all up at the end to point out how meaningless it is. I wonder, could you be referring to how petty people are in basing judgements on looks/ the physical? Or how everyone is really the same inside? Or, how nobody matters, because we're all full of.... nothing? Each is a valid interpretation, which makes this one a winner!
03-29-2011, 02:53 PM
The rhyme and the syntax were unusual at times, but on the whole I quite liked this. Witty yet serious.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
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