No Shelter on the Front
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The front was all harshness, grey and jagged sea;
Stone, stung ears, a lone bar of rock cast off in water.
We lived close to white villas,
Misplaced as though they were in Spain, keeping out the sun,
Only for gulls to pace by greasy cardboard
As lightbulbs swung, leaching colour.
 
A gull dove once;
Its lifeless eyes peered right at us.
I told my father it wanted my plaice,
Which looked golden, folded in crimped notes of batter.
They were crafty too: used their webbing to drum upon the Common,
like rain making things below the dirt come through.
But he smiled, and told me,
‘It can’t tell between the glass and us inside.’  
 
I remember the street ran leeward to a curb,
Where young ladies also gathered.
You never knew their names, but they were so beautiful
I wanted to give them the dark green bottle shards
Worn to coarse mottled emeralds by the beach. 
But more than the little girls, who dropped the glassy chinks aloud,
I couldn’t face the glancing smiles,
Which skipped and swivelled to the wash,
Or shone their glistening teeth aground,
And gently lost my gaze. 
 
I once saw through our window,
A poor man pace too,
Before he slipped the corner of my eye.
 
But I knew if, quickly, I reached the sill,
My sightline could catch him
From our vantage, close the gap,
Wind him in 
 
From the stricken rocks
and endless, curling water chops,
Past footfall by the Common’s grass,
Where features swirl the promenade,
Past smitten cheeks blushed with cold,
Their colour kept in mantle folds,
To facets vaunting, from our road,
My searching glimpse through our…
 
Still, it never winds back to me,
His soft vagrant stare,
At home, Out there,
Stolen far off to sea.
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(3 hours ago)Stan Wrote:  The front was all harshness, grey and jagged sea;
Stone, stung ears, a lone bar of rock cast off in water.
We lived close to white villas,
Misplaced as though they were in Spain, keeping out the sun,
Only for gulls to pace by greasy cardboard
As lightbulbs swung, leaching colour.
 
A gull dove once;
Its lifeless eyes peered right at us.
I told my father it wanted my plaice,
Which looked golden, folded in crimped notes of batter.
They were crafty too: used their webbing to drum upon the Common,
like rain making things below the dirt come through.
But he smiled, and told me,
‘It can’t tell between the glass and us inside.’  
 
I remember the street ran leeward to a curb,
Where young ladies also gathered.
You never knew their names, but they were so beautiful
I wanted to give them the dark green bottle shards
Worn to coarse mottled emeralds by the beach. 
But more than the little girls, who dropped the glassy chinks aloud,
I couldn’t face the glancing smiles,
Which skipped and swivelled to the wash,
Or shone their glistening teeth aground,
And gently lost my gaze. 
 
I once saw through our window,
A poor man pace too,
Before he slipped the corner of my eye.
 
But I knew if, quickly, I reached the sill,
My sightline could catch him
From our vantage, close the gap,
Wind him in 
 
From the stricken rocks
and endless, curling water chops,
Past footfall by the Common’s grass,
Where features swirl the promenade,
Past smitten cheeks blushed with cold,
Their colour kept in mantle folds,
To facets vaunting, from our road,
My searching glimpse through our…
 
Still, it never winds back to me,
His soft vagrant stare,
At home, Out there,
Stolen far off to sea.

It's giving Frost and Heaney had a baby. Love the discursive voice and the productive digressions of image and sense. 
Need to give this one a few reads and Let That Sink In but I'm pretty positive on this draft off the bat. Very convincing voice.
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