By the Firth

[Magpie]

By myself by the Firth

three otters 
beneath the boardwalk
-- sharing a fish

I pretend to watch nonchalantly
so other people don't know

[wasellajam]

By myself by the Firth

three otters 
beneath the boardwalk
-- sharing a fish

I pretend to watch nonchalantly
so other people don't know

So effective. I don't know if making the last two lines less blunt would help or hurt. You may not need the last line.
Thanks for posting this.

[Magpie]

Thanks Ella, I'm going back and forth between dropping some of it.

I pretend to watch nonchalantly
so other people don't know

thinking about dropping this. 

I would drop the last line if I thought it was implied, I'm confused about it.

Does the contrast between watching animals sharing and the narrator not wanting to share it with other people still come through I wonder?

Thanks for reading.

[wasellajam]

Thanks Ella, I'm going back and forth between dropping some of it.

I pretend to watch nonchalantly
so other people don't know

thinking about dropping this. 

I would drop the last line if I thought it was implied, I'm confused about it.

Does the contrast between watching animals sharing and the narrator not wanting to share it with other people still come through I wonder?

Thanks for reading.

I think the last two lines do a needed job, I can see the N and they make the whole poem heartbreaking, I'm just thinking they might be more subtle.