Stairy night

[Smiley]

It feels like flying with a broken wing
I realised im more than just a thing
Flying there, with the stars up above
Hinting at a message of love

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I should maybe start putting my stuff, my work, into the section for gaining critique. I was scared of getting it but i feel thiis is an OK place to get some feedback since i find you guys very friendly and positive. So i startet to crave attention and hearing about it when its was offered with such a spirit. Like a fresh breathe of air! What do you guys think so far about those small poems i have been warming up with?

[Magpie]

Hi smiley, you should put a poem into one of the critique forums, you will of course have to critique others poems before doing so. It's difficult to give critique at first but it's a really good way of finding out what makes a good poem and therefore you become a better poet.

Firstly, did you mean 'starry' night? 
You start your poem with a statement, 'It feels like flying with a broken wing' without the reader knowing what it is. Flying with a broken wing would be extremely painful so we can only presume that it's torturous experience you are comparing. The rest of the poem does not clarify the statement and the mention of 'love' confuses the matter even further.
Be careful of getting lost in the rhyme and rhythm of a piece at the cost of a clear meaning.
I feel like the middle two lines are filler. If you take them out then you are left with.
 

It feels like flying with a broken wing
Hinting at a message of love

Which becomes a more interesting image. Metaphors are stronger than similes so it could become

Flying with a broken wing
Hinting at a message of love

Then it becomes how you can frame it differently. As a sentence the summary could be.

'If I were a bird with a broken wing I could still fly to you because our love is so strong'

then how do you write that as a short poem?

Work with and see what you think.

Cheers for the read.

[Smiley]

Hi smiley, you should put a poem into one of the critique forums, you will of course have to critique others poems before doing so. It's difficult to give critique at first but it's a really good way of finding out what makes a good poem and therefore you become a better poet.

Firstly, did you mean 'starry' night? 
You start your poem with a statement, 'It feels like flying with a broken wing' without the reader knowing what it is. Flying with a broken wing would be extremely painful so we can only presume that it's torturous experience you are comparing. The rest of the poem does not clarify the statement and the mention of 'love' confuses the matter even further.
Be careful of getting lost in the rhyme and rhythm of a piece at the cost of a clear meaning.
I feel like the middle two lines are filler. If you take them out then you are left with.
 

It feels like flying with a broken wing
Hinting at a message of love

Which becomes a more interesting image. Metaphors are stronger than similes so it could become

Flying with a broken wing
Hinting at a message of love

Then it becomes how you can frame it differently. As a sentence the summary could be.

'If I were a bird with a broken wing I could still fly to you because our love is so strong'

then how do you write that as a short poem?

Work with and see what you think.

Cheers for the read.

Yea, something to think about   after a few threads of these short poems i recently wrote, it feels as if im warming up. Its tough for me to give feedback thou becuse i dont resonate with all of them. But some wispered into my soul and good thing theres plenty of them

[Magpie]

It's ok to say that a poem doesn't resonate with you, you can still give it a critique and even incorporate why it doesn't resonate with you as part of the critique, especially if you could give suggestions as to how to make it more engaging.

[Smiley]

It's ok to say that a poem doesn't resonate with you, you can still give it a critique and even incorporate why it doesn't resonate with you as part of the critique, especially if you could give suggestions as to how to make it more engaging.

Got it!

[wasellajam]

It's ok to say that a poem doesn't resonate with you, you can still give it a critique and even incorporate why it doesn't resonate with you as part of the critique, especially if you could give suggestions as to how to make it more engaging.

Got it!

You can also pick a poem you like and try to figure out what makes it appeal to you. A positive critique is fine if you can give details about what you like and why. Here's a thread with what to look for when you read.
Just a few points will make a critique.

https://www.pigpenpoetry.com/thread-25166.html