speaking in whispers

[Mark A Becker]

speaking in whispers
with voices deeper than bones
old ghosts have returned

[Tiger the Lion]

speaking in whispers
with voices deeper than bones
old ghosts have returned

Hey Mark. Assuming you want to adhere to 5-7-5, a few quick thoughts...

"their voices..." might be less of a filler word than "with voices"
also "returning" rather than "have returned" - for both filler word and tense

[Bunx]

I really like this short form poem. I read Tigers suggestions and I feel adding the present tense "returning" at the end adds a sense of urgency I really like in the poem. Regardless I definitely felt very drawn in and wonder if it has a title?
Thanks for the post