Train At Night

[John Randall]

The sound of an unseen train at night,
 Repeating over stuttering tracks 
Into dark distance. 
I am glad to be standing still 
Just outside my front door, feet firm to the familiar, listening. 
The train howl shrinks and I envy its transition. 
How courageous at this late hour.

[Magpie]

It reads a lot easier now that you've put line breaks in it as opposed to the original long sentences.
You've got a good image and concept here, I've left a few notes below

The sound of an unseen train at night, - good image to start 
 Repeating over stuttering tracks  - don't need to capitalise each line unless it's a new sentence - stuttering tracks doesn't quite work for me, the sound seems like a stutter not the tracks, may need rewording
Into dark distance.  - dark seems redundant 

I am glad to be standing still, - could make this a new stanza - how about another word instead of 'still' it introduces some ambiguity - also comma at the end, which would actually negate the ambiguity, but another word would be better
Just outside my front door, - you could split this line into three
feet firm to the familiar. - this seems close to a cliché 
Listening. 

The train howl shrinks and I envy its transition. - this could be a new stanza - don't need train - is it a 'howl'? are we talking about the train or the train whistle - not so sure about envying a trains transition
How courageous at this late hour. - nice sentiment, but can a train be courageous? These last two lines don't quite work

The build up is good, although I would prefer some more poetic language and description. The last two lines as a conclusion are not quite working for me. Not sure about the personification of a train. Perhaps another way of concluding.

Also a new title could help as the current one is already within the poem.

Cheers for the read

[meadzbabyy]

The bones of this poem are very solid, maybe just add in some more creative descriptor words? But regardless, nice job

[Natangwe]

The sound of an unseen train at night,
 Repeating over stuttering tracks 
Into dark distance. 
I am glad to be standing still 
Just outside my front door, feet firm to the familiar, listening. 
The train howl shrinks and I envy its transition. 
How courageous at this late hour.

Overall, I like the hopeful and somewhat nostalgic atmosphere created. Some remarks from my (rather uneducated) perspective:

(2) " Repeating over stuttering tracks": I like the use of tracks here: train tracks & audio tracks. Conveys that the speaker is very familiar with this sound. Not sure about the use of "stuttering" here, does not really match the theme of a recording or train tracks for me.
(Small detail: The space in front of "Repeating" in the second line throws me off a little. I believe it is not on purpose?)
(3) "Into dark distance": Seems redundant with "at night". Maybe ommiting "at night" in the first line could create some tension regarding why the train is unseen?
(4) "I am glad to be standing still": Standing still gives me the feeling of remaining in ones place physically but also that of no change/progress. For me, the question why the speaker is glad to be in this state arises. Is it the contrast of standing still while the train is moving?
(5)  "Just outside my front door, feet firm to the familiar, listening.": For me it reads more as "familiar listening", rather than "familiar, listening".  
(6) "The train howl shrinks and I envy its transition." Is a train howl a sound that can shrink? I imagined the train sound to be that of a train moving over tracks (due to the second line) and not that of a train whistle/howl. Also, I do not really understand the transition part, but that may very well just be me.
(7) "How courageous at this late hour." I really like this ending line, it puts perspective into the feelings of the speaker. Together with the line (4) it makes me think that the speaker admires the ever-moving nature of the train (that requires courage) while he is just standing still (but again: why is the speaker glad that he is standing still then?). 

This is my first critique, I hope it still helps. Thanks for the read!

[NCPoetWannaBe1974]

The sound of an unseen train at night,
Repeating over stuttering tracks
Into dark distance.
I am glad to be standing still
Just outside my front door, feet firm to the familiar, listening.
The train howl shrinks and I envy its transition.
How courageous at this late hour.

First, I'd like to begin by saying I'm no critic. I like the poem a lot. Perhaps a bit too much "my" and "I" though not sure how you'd go about getting around it. Really like the line, "The train howl shrinks and I envy its transition." Feels like I'm there with you, experiencing it firsthand. Fantastic work, hope to read more in the future! Thanks for sharing!

[nana]

The sound of an unseen train at night,
 Repeating over stuttering tracks 
Into dark distance. 
I am glad to be standing still 
Just outside my front door, feet firm to the familiar, listening. 
The train howl shrinks and I envy its transition. 
How courageous at this late hour.

I really like the imagery of the train in this poem and the scene you set up. The pacing and rhythm was also done really well, in my opinion. Some things to consider is maybe adding some more description about how you relate to the trains movement. At one point you are glad to be standing still and then a few lines later you are envious of the trains transition, so that's maybe something you can flesh out a bit more.