Arrivederci winter

[HAWK2567]

Arriverderci winter

Now it is finally the time
To say
Arrivederci winter
It was indeed a long Winter
I was already getting sick
Of the winter
That never seem to ended
Now finally my Father brought the spring today
And I am very happy about that
Also my Father brought back
Home the birds that I was missing
For a long time now
At night time I live the windows
Open so it can cool my house

ALDO Gabbay kraas

[Quixilated]

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Arriverderci winter

Now it is finally the time
To say
Arrivederci winter
It was indeed a long Winter
I was already getting sick
Of the winter
That never seemed to end
Now finally my Father brought the spring today
And I am very happy about that
Also my Father brought back
Home the birds that I was missing
For a long time now
At night time I leave the windows
Open so it can cool my house

ALDO Gabbay kraas

Hello Hawk, welcome to the pigpen.  

In my part of the world we are heading into winter, so spring is much farther away. I especially like the line where the father brings back the birds. There were a few words that were incorrect, I’m assuming it’s a translation error. I added the corrections in green.  Adding punctuation would also make this easier for the reader.  

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Thank you,
—Quix