Haiku -- Curious Cosmos

[Lizzie]

Curious Cosmos,
sees its golden seeds dropping,
peeks over the vase.

Cosmos is a kind of flower https://www.hgtv.com/outdoors/flowers-an...os-flowers

[Wjames]

This is nice, Lizzie - I picture the sun rising at the edge of the horizon, with a purple morning sky behind and above it.

[Lizzie]

Sorry Wjames, I added the spoiler after you had already commented. I think my title was too wild and confusing.

[brynmawr1]

maybe "Fresh Cuttings"?

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Okay, you snuck in and changed the title.  Wilted seems a little dark for the tone of the poem.

[TranquillityBase]

maybe "Fresh Cuttings"?

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Okay, you snuck in and changed the title.  Wilted seems a little dark for the tone of the poem.

I'd second Bryn on the title business.

[Quixilated]

Curious Cosmos,
sees its golden seeds dropping,
peeks over the vase.

Cosmos is a kind of flower https://www.hgtv.com/outdoors/flowers-an...os-flowers

A delightful poem. I can picture this scene.  Though I haven’t had cosmos in a vase, I’ve had this experience with tulips.  A few days in, once they begin to wilt, they really do look like they are bending their heads over the side of the vase to look down at all the petals and pollen and seeds they have been spilling onto the table as though they are saying, “Good gracious, who has been making this mess?”

[Lizzie]

Curious Cosmos,
sees its golden seeds dropping,
peeks over the vase.

Cosmos is a kind of flower https://www.hgtv.com/outdoors/flowers-an...os-flowers

A delightful poem. I can picture this scene.  Though I haven’t had cosmos in a vase, I’ve had this experience with tulips.  A few days in, once they begin to wilt, they really do look like they are bending their heads over the side of the vase to look down at all the petals and pollen and seeds they have been spilling onto the table as though they are saying, “Good gracious, who has been making this mess?”

Yes, tulips definitely do this too 

Then they hold a little tulip trial and implicate Tiffany. She's terribly un-tidy.

[Tiger the Lion]

A dog will live 20 years on cheap food, water and a little exercise. Plants too often give up the ghost no matter how much love they get. It's a frustrating process learning their needs. One moment they stand proud, the next they slump for attention.

Edit and P.S.

Titles are cheating. Why stick to 17 syllables if you have a title?

[Mark A Becker]

Hi Lizzie -

I gotta agree with Paul that titles for haiku are cheating. Why not make the first line the title? Or just 'cosmos'? Or 'curious'?

That said, it's a splendid little poem once I understood what cosmos were.

- Mark

[Lizzie]

Haiku rule #45,983,234 has been noted.
Hated title was removed.

[Tiger the Lion]

Haiku rule #45,983,234 has been noted.
Hated title was removed.

haha, loved the haiku. didn't hate the title - just didn't need it

[TranquillityBase]

Haiku rule #45,983,234 has been noted.
Hated title was removed.

haha, loved the haiku. didn't hate the title - just didn't need it

Any way to have a separate Haiku section, where the title field is just prepopulated with the word Haiku?

TqB

[Magpie]

Curious Cosmos,
sees its golden seeds dropping,
peeks over the vase.

I like it as a short poem. 
If you put 'haiku' in the title then you're gonna get freaks like me that'll say it's not. 
If you take 'haiku' out of the title then it solves all issues. I would say that in a haiku; cosmos could not be curious, whether it be the flower or the universe. However if it's not a haiku then it works perfectly and it also allows the possibility of ambiguity with Cosmos, which I as a reader want, especially when the Cosmos is curious.

Anyway like I said, I'm a freak

and your link to a picture of a flower is broken

Mark

[TranquillityBase]

Link works for me.

Yeah, just call it Curious Cosmos.

I think all poems' titles should be their first line.  That's the kind of freak I am.

TqB