Auntie Audrey

[Tiger the Lion]

Auntie Audrey

too much a type 
of poor Lot's wife
she got salty 
with the paradigms

with that sweet Sodom burning 
at her back, her turning
seemed slightly less terrifying

than entering 
the kingdom of God 
an impostor

[brynmawr1]

Auntie Audrey

too much a type 
of poor Lot's wife
she got salty 
with the paradigms

with that sweet Sodom burning 
at her back, her turning
seemed slightly less terrifying

than entering 
the kingdom of God 
an impostor

Hi Tiger,
Nice one.  My only hang up is S1 L4 using 'paradigms' seems out of place and vague.  Seems like you could cut that line and it would read the same.
Either way, enjoyed it.
bryn

[TranquillityBase]

Auntie Audrey

too much a type 
of poor Lot's wife
she got salty 
with the paradigms

with that sweet Sodom burning 
at her back, her turning
seemed slightly less terrifying

than entering 
the kingdom of God 
an impostor

Agree with Bryn about the "paradigm" line.  I'd also suggest cutting "slightly" in line 3 of second stanza.

TqB

[Tiger the Lion]

Auntie Audrey (edit)

too much a type 
of poor Lot's wife
she got salty 
with her plot in life

even now 
with that sweet Sodom burning 
at her back, 
her turning
appears to be much less concerning

than entering 
the kingdom of God 
an impostor

Auntie Audrey

too much a type 
of poor Lot's wife
she got salty 
with the paradigms

with that sweet Sodom burning 
at her back, her turning
seemed slightly less terrifying

than entering 
the kingdom of God 
an impostor