Girl and boy

[busker]

Girl and boy

Beauty, your eyes are
forever beautiful. Like the light 
of cloudy days. The wind when it sighs
in the battlements 
of fortresses lost to time
is your one of a kind
way of speaking to me,
beloved of my mind.

Love is a wonder
meant to be 
lived to the fullest joy,
girl and boy,
and your face is forever 
new life to me. Florence is for lovers,
and you’ll be my other through the centuries.

[Kynaston Levitt]

before I start a line by line, I just want to say I can't make head nor tail of this poem. 

Girl and boy

Beauty, your eyes are
forever beautiful—Are you talking to "beauty" as a concept, a platonic form? In which case, would it have eyes? And if it did, wouldn't it be redundant to mention it had beautiful eyes?. Like the light
of cloudy days. The wind when it sighs—A line break after "days.", surely? And...
in the battlements 
of fortresses lost to time
is your one of a kind
way of speaking to me,—Far better would be "Your one of a kind way of speaking to me is like the wind when it sighs... etc" although, the "of of" still sounds awful and clumsy. 
beloved of my mind.—this makes no sense.

Love is a wonder
meant to be 
lived to the fullest joy,—is it? Why? If you are going to make a declarative statement like that your poem has to give us a reason to either agree with or feel it. 
girl and boy,
and your face is forever 
new life to me. Florence is for lovers,
and you’ll be my other through the centuries.—This last part is either so personal to you specifically to be hardly worth posting, or it is so cryptically poetic that it's meaningless to anyone that doesn't treat poems as general knowledge quizzes. 

[busker]

Kynaston Levitt, thank you for your well thought out criticism.
I will ponder upon it, like Diogenes

[TranquillityBase]

Girl and boy

Beauty, your eyes are
forever beautiful. Like the light 
of cloudy days. The wind when it sighs
in the battlements 
of fortresses lost to time        "lost in time" feels overused (by myself among other); "broken by time" (?)
is your one of a kind
way of speaking to me,
beloved of my mind.

Love is a wonder
meant to be 
lived to the fullest joy,
girl and boy,                     seems unnecessary since it is already your title
and your face is forever 
new life to me. Florence is for lovers,
and you’ll be my other through the centuries.  Other (?)

Busker,

Deceptively simple, but quietly beautiful.  A few suggestions above.

TqB

[Kynaston Levitt]

Kynaston Levitt, thank you for your well thought out criticism.
I will ponder upon it, like Diogenes

I had to look Diogenes up. Seems like a cool cat. I'm also flattered because that makes me Plato in this little pantomime :*

[busker]

Girl and boy

Beauty, your eyes are
forever beautiful. Like the light 
of cloudy days. The wind when it sighs
in the battlements 
of fortresses lost to time        "lost in time" feels overused (by myself among other); "broken by time" (?)
is your one of a kind
way of speaking to me,
beloved of my mind.

Love is a wonder
meant to be 
lived to the fullest joy,
girl and boy,                     seems unnecessary since it is already your title
and your face is forever 
new life to me. Florence is for lovers,
and you’ll be my other through the centuries.  Other (?)

Busker,

Deceptively simple, but quietly beautiful.  A few suggestions above.

TqB

TqB - thanks for the feedback.
Appreciate the suggestion on ‘lost to time’, which is indeed a cliche
I threw in a few clues regarding the identity of the narrator, with Florence, New Life, and a love of the mind. Not sure if they made for an a-ha moment.

[TranquillityBase]

I threw in a few clues regarding the identity of the narrator, with Florence, New Life, and a love of the mind. Not sure if they made for an a-ha moment.

Yep, I did pick up on those, and did an a-ha.