Flying Pigsfeet
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Flying Pigsfeet

Ann had cooked the pigsfeet. Cat and Alice brought the steaks.
Clare arrived with veggies and Sarah’s tasty cakes.
Family members talked and laughed before we took our seats.
The house was filled with smells of food. I couldn’t wait to eat.

It was a lavish dinner on the eve of Halloween.
The table was bedecked with food. What a scrumptious scene!
We all sat down and bowed our heads while Pete said holy grace.
Then, everyone began to eat at a wondrous tasty pace.

The steak was tender, the veggies right, can’t wait for cake and pie.
Poured hotsauce on my pigsfeet when something caught my eye.
All plates began to tremble. The food commenced to fling.
Stunned I was by an eerie sight. The pigsfeet sprouted WINGS !

They hovered over the table. The guests were wide-eyed shocked.
Pigsfeet began to chase us like an evil was unlocked.
One divebombed and landed on top of Cat’s combed hair.
She dropped her purse and started cursing “Get the heck out there!”

Another raced across the room, colliding on Ray’s thigh.
The one I saw came straight at me and barely missed my eye.
The dinner was delicious but no longer was it fun.
The guests had bolted from their chairs and now were on the run.

No sooner had they started, then silence made them STOP!
They peered around the corner and the pigsfeet all had dropped.
What made them fly’s a question. The answer? Not routine,
'cause we thought scary zone had landed here on Halloween!
Well, that was last night’s dinner but our fears continue on
since we have breakfast invites and my stomach’s not too strong.

Before you eat those peas and corn, toast or slice of beef;
before you roast those chicken legs, look well at what you eat.
If it turns its head or winks and you miss that single cue,
you’ll think it’s hot and smelling good but this food may eat you!
Then YOU’LL be in the stew! Now give that thought a chew!
That’s all there is! So, eat your food. Now, I’ve warned you!

Namyh
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(04-21-2023, 05:17 AM)Namyh Wrote:  Flying Pigsfeet

Ann had cooked the pigsfeet. Cat and Alice brought the steaks.
Clare arrived with vegees and Sarah’s tasty cakes.
Family members talked and laughed before we took our seats.
The house was filled with smells of food. I couldn’t wait to eat.

It was a lavish dinner on the eve of Halloween.
The table was bedecked with food. What a scrumptious scene!
We all sat down and bowed our heads while Pete, he said the grace.
Then, everyone began to eat at a wondrous tasty pace.

The steak was tender, the vegees right, can’t wait for cake and pie.
Poured hotsauce on my pigsfeet when something caught my eye.
All plates began to tremble. The food commenced to fling.
Shocked I was by an eerie sight. The pigsfeet sprouted WINGS !

They hovered over the table. The guests were wide-eyed shocked.
Pigsfeet began to chase us like an evil was unlocked.
One divebombed and landed on top of Cat’s combed hair.
She dropped her purse and started cursing “Get the heck out there!”

Another raced across the room, colliding on Ray’s thigh.
The one I saw came straight at me and barely missed my eye.
The dinner was delicious but no longer was it fun.
The guests had bolted from their chairs and now were on the run.

No sooner had they started, then silence made them STOP!
They peered around the corner and the pigsfeet all had dropped.
What made them fly’s a question. The answer? Not routine,
'cause we thought Twilight Zone had landed here on Halloween!
Well, that was last night’s dinner but our fears continue on
since we have breakfast invites and my stomach’s not too strong.

Before you eat those peas and corn, toast or slice of beef;
before you roast those chicken legs, look well at what you eat.
If it turns its head or winks and you miss that single cue,
you’ll think it’s hot and smelling good but this food may eat you!
Then YOU’LL be in the stew! Now give that thought a chew!
That’s all there is! Now, I’ve warned you!

Namyh
I enjoyed this, Namyh. 
Since it's in "fun" I won't comment how tweaking some of the meter would make it even more enjoyable.  Hysterical
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Tiger the Lion - Thanks for stopping by and enjoying this work. Hope it put a smile on ya. Namyh
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There were a couple of things that caught my eye:

~ Was 'vegees' an intentional typo for veggies? I was a bit confused by that spelling as it kept cropping up.

~ Shocked I was by an eerie sight. The pigsfeet sprouted WINGS !

They hovered over the table. The guests were wide-eyed shocked.

  I don't know if it's best to put "shocked" down twice, and so close together. Maybe you could say "Stunned I was by an eerie sight" and leave "shocked" for the next line?

Aside from these little things, the poem feels very solid. I love how your rhymes don't come across as forced and the bursts of strategic capitalization are punchy and bold. Such a fun piece of work, great job!  Smile
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dare I even ask - Mighty glad this was fun, solid, punchy and bold for you. This poet scribbler couldn't ask for more. Your suggestions were very good and were used. Thanks for stopping in at this family dinner where you can eat all day what might one day eat you. Poets! We just never know from where the next inspiration will come. Hallelujah for that! Thanks DareI. Namyh
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#6
Pretty good! Love the energy in this!
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#7
Poetry in Motion - Now I'm glad I added that extra shot of energy into this work. Mighty happy you enjoyed PIM. Namyh
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