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[Tiger the Lion]

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I decide on “Low Rider” by War
and cue the music
while she showers.
(this is where you search the song
if so inclined to play along)
She exits the bathroom
with one towel on her head
another round her torso
and eyes too serious to bare.

I press play
and for 3 minutes
we dance like gods might fuck.

There’s a towel on the floor,
an appointment that mustn’t be missed
and a decision to be made.

We make it together.





https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ILN7hG4kUFg

[TranquillityBase]

I took a little trip and saw how fun your poem is.

Thanks for brightening my morning.

[brynmawr1]

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I decide on “Low Rider” by War
and cue the music
while she showers.
(this is where you search the song
if so inclined to play along)
She exits the bathroom
with one towel on her head
another round her torso
and eyes too serious to bare.

I press play
and for 3 minutes
we dance like gods might fuck.

There’s a towel on the floor,
an appointment that mustn’t be missed
and a decision to be made.

We make it together.





https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ILN7hG4kUFg

Nicely done, Tiger.  I particularly like the double meaning of ‘bare’.

[Mark A Becker]

Hi Paul-
Nicely drawn, yet as usual, I suggest some subtraction, and other minor changes:

Maybe re-think the title. ??

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I decide on “Low Rider” by War
and cue the music
while she showers.

She exits the bathroom
a towel on her head, another round her torso
and eyes too serious to bare.

Then, a towel on the floor,
an appointment that mustn’t be missed;
a decision to be made.

We make it together.

[Namyh]

TigerTL - Now that definitely brings back old times. Thanks for the memories. Enjoyed, Namyh