But That Was Yesterday

[digna_sofia]

...today, there is the hunger for definition
with up-to-date precision
incisive, decisive, divisive insistence
on all interpretation

a hunger, a want, a need, a revolution
feeding us a chop suey platter of confusion
a clatter of solutions to no problems at all
a silence on the matter of diffusions of war.

There's no science of the quiet of the breath of a union
no psychology of bridging and fence-sitting opinion
no passion for compassion, but outraged disillusion.
Just...quest for truth, by way of confusion.

But this
will be yesterday
I hope

Been a while since I last wrote. Please be honest.

[Lawrence]

Stray from abstractions such as "outraged disillusion"; I got zero imagery from most of this. Rather than TELLING us about confusion, you need to illustrate it. Stay away from phrases such as "quest for truth", as they are cliche. The first line is good, but I would re-work the rest of it.

As for how you're going to go about doing that, I don't know. I'd like to see some concrete similes, surprises, maybe some meter and a rhyme scheme (you drift in and out of one). It was a fine attempt, but you can do better.
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I'd stay away from that sort of thing for now. It doesn't look good, nor does it add anything valuable. Good luck with the revisions.