Karma's a Bitch

[brynmawr1]

The bullied bully cries
     
flipping a two-headed coin,

Tiny hand reaching for sympathy.

The bullied bully cries
     foul;
flipping its two-headed coin.

Tiny hands reaching for sympathy.

[Semicircle]

The bullied bully cries
     foul;
playing both sides
of a two-headed coin.

Tiny hands reaching for sympathy.

HA. Well done. 

The space between cries and fowl, makes the bully seem vulnerable. 

I think the bully should flip the coin instead, to show his opposite head. They're vulnerable now.

[brynmawr1]

The bullied bully cries
     foul;
playing both sides
of a two-headed coin.

Tiny hands reaching for sympathy.

HA. Well done. 

The space between cries and fowl, makes the bully seem vulnerable. 

I think the bully should flip the coin instead, to show his opposite head. They're vulnerable now.

Thanks Sc.  Was making that edit when I saw your suggestion.
bryn

[rowens]

Time marches on, for whom the bell tolls.

The song absorbs and transcends the literary reference.

Live in the now.

[brynmawr1]

Time marches on, for whom the bell tolls.

The song absorbs and transcends the literary reference.

Live in the now.

So I should go back to "Karma's a Bitch"? Or time informs the now, telling us not to ask.

[rowens]

The song reference and the multiple literary references are the same thing.

You are controlling how these symbols-allusions work.

Neither title fits the poem as it is.
The first title makes more immediate sense.

[brynmawr1]

The song reference and the multiple literary references are the same thing.

You are controlling how these symbols-allusions work.

Neither title fits the poem as it is.
The first title makes more immediate sense.

written in the moment for the moment.  The talkin' does the walkin'.  So the title can sit and watch.

[rowens]

Lose foul.

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and lose its

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replace its with a

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tiny hand instead of tiny hands