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Nails and twine on a barn wall.
Rusty tools hang from flaking oak.
Hay matted from the struggle of pigs,
stains near faded inside the outline.
Invisible scythes swoop
over dried corn stalks;
methodical atrophy.
Stone-opened-holes
in a paper wasp nest,
swaying.
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(10-07-2022, 11:53 AM)Semicircle Wrote: Nails and twine on a barn wall.
Rusty tools hang from flaking oak.
Hay matted from the struggle of pigs,
stains near faded inside the outline.
Invisible scythes swoop
over dried corn stalks;
methodical atrophy.
Stone-opened-holes
in a paper wasp nest,
swaying.
Hi Sc,
I like the imagery here. It gives a great macabre/holloween feel. For me, it suffers some from missing a more concrete narrative to give it a sense of progression and emotional impact.
Happy haunting,
bryn
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Methodical atrophy has a very slow progression, longer than we have time to consider. I might consider incorporating this to a time we could understand it, short.
Photographs don't have a narrative.
Happy haunting Bryn.
