Christmas future

[Semicircle]

This is what you would become

had I not shown the future.

I’ll give you the choice–

will you defy nature

to further your own ends

or will you bear responsibility?

Either way, I can trust in you

to make the wrong decision.

[TranquillityBase]

This is what you would become

had I not shown the future.

I’ll give you the choice–

will you defy nature

to further your own ends

or will you bear responsibility?

Either way, I can trust on you

to make the wrong decision.

I really like the setup (first three lines), but not so much the choices or the conclusion.  Just too much of a downer.  Maybe if you could consense it more:

I'll give you the choice-
defy nature
or bear responsibility?

As for the conclusion, I'm not going to put words in your mouth.....I'd even say cut the conclusion.

Just my 2 cents/sense,
Thanks for the read of both poems.

[dukealien]

This is what you would become

had I not shown the future.

I’ll give you the choice–

will you defy nature

to further your own ends

or will you bear responsibility?

Either way, I can trust on you

to make the wrong decision.

In basic critique, this is certainly intriguing.  Spoken, presumably, by a self-conscious seer (or crystal ball?) confident of his/her/its accuracy in the initial prediction but not actually certain - except in a somewhat snarky way - of the querent's reaction.

My strongest suggestion is to change "on" to "in" simply because "trust in" is the more usual expression (as is "depend on," but that would widen the "hips" of the picture   ).

A more nebulous observation is that the two described options aren't strictly opposite or distinct - a person could defy nature BY choosing to bear responsibility, for example.  But by defining them as distinct, the reader is forced  (or at least encouraged) to construct a scenario in which they are.  Neat.

[Semicircle]

This is what you would become

had I not shown the future.

I’ll give you the choice–

will you defy nature

to further your own ends

or will you bear responsibility?

Either way, I can trust in you

to make the wrong decision.

I have improved it, thanks for the critiques Duke and Base. I will keep the downer ending though, I think it resonates more than if it was just a simple question because of its accusatory tone.

Also, I'm laughing Duke, that's a good one.