"Madness."

[Ris Yerg]

I make my dry
Wooden thoughts
Alive.
Then I cremate them
Alive.
With ash I fertilize
My scanty mind.
Once it yields
Something
Alive.
And it cremates me.
Alive.

[billy]

I make my dry
Wooden thoughts
Alive.
Then I cremate them
Alive. is this line needed?
With ash I fertilize
My scanty mind.
Once it yields
Something
Alive.
And it cremates me. is 'and' needed?
Alive.

for me there's only enough room for two 'alives. in the poem.
i like the way you use renewal as an interpretation
for the imagination. how when we do think of something it burns us up then it dies and we think of something else.
thanks for the read RY

[addy]

I really like your metaphor here, and how you turned it so dynamic and vital... the image was vivid and crisp in my mind as a reader. Like billy said, cyclical. I also love the reversal at the end. Good stuff.

[Ris Yerg]

Hi, friends!
Thanks a lot for kind comments!
R.Y.