The monarch's court

[Semicircle]

The judge is always
distracted by butterflies
flitting throughout his court
and his victims all plea
regarding his insanity

[Mark A Becker]

Hey semi slicer-
I really like the first two lines, but the rhymes that follow are long stretches for a short piece.
Throwing stuff up to see if it sticks is fine, but this one bounced right off.
…  Mark

[Semicircle]

Hey semi slicer-
I really like the first two lines, but the rhymes that follow are long stretches for a short piece.
Throwing stuff up to see if it sticks is fine, but this one bounced right off.
…  Mark

Thanks for the critique,
I have adjusted accordingly. 

(:

[Erthona]

Semicircle,
The first part is not too bad, but I think you could do without the last to lines and for especially the last line makes no sense. Instead of

"of his insanity"

"regarding his insanity"

I think it smooths out the line.

I like the double entendre with the butterfly.

best,

dale