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Nowhere left on the inside:
You lead, I follow.
Staring amongst the stars,
Rooted to the world.
Your fingers entwine with mine
As you say goodbye.
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Amongst the stars, you are lifted in this moment at least. Or, amongst isn't a right word. Or, it's a wish. Or, that's simply what happened.
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Just note that "staring amongst" is different from "staring at" -- amongst means the speaker is one with the stars, at means, well, it means what it means. I can't quite tell if it's intentional, since there's not much to go by -- not even a "yet" in line 4, to highlight the contradiction.