Refuse

[Kerbonzo_beenz]

Inside the eye of the storm, atop the the highest summit.
Clouds billowing inside his ears, mushroom blue lightning fires down from them.
Choking down the inertia from the first attempt, Inching slowly back towards the edge. 
So he gives a running start.
The world plummets down with him as he screams out in mortal pain; amplified by the horns of death.
He fell into a void where ground should have been and now he screams eternally.

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey Beenz. I actually liked the version posted on the Suicide thread more. This line specifically... 
"Inching towards the edge --no, not like this-- so he gives a running start." there is a 'real time' action to it

Inside the eye of the storm, atop the the highest summit. suggest tweaking the cliche out of "eye of the storm"
Clouds billowing inside his ears, mushroom blue lightning fires down from them. from the clouds, or his ears?
Choking down the inertia from the first attempt, Inching slowly back towards the edge. 
So he gives a running start.
The world plummets down with him as he screams out in mortal pain; amplified by the horns of death. cliche again with "mortal pain"
He fell into a void where ground should have been and now he screams eternally. Like the last line but would  prefer the line broken up. Same with the poem as a whole. Attention to line breaks would improve the reading.