Humdinger
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Like thin paper doused in hot vaper.
Wispy strands running under the skin.
A gaunt torso that ends with a taper.
Tail ending with a fin.
Bulging milky eyes like black speckle skies.
A torpedo shooting under the water.
There is only one to exist now.
Others of it's kind it did slaughter.
Lurking in the Mariana Trench.
Seven miles down below.
Where it feeds on sea pigs.
And gradually it grows.
It's as charming as a mudskipper.
It's as cunning as an eel.
Granting wishes to humans.
In exchange for a banana peel.
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#2
Is there a reason every line has a capital letter to start the line except for L12? And periods? Is a humdinger a difficult question?
Peanut butter honey banana sandwiches
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#3
There wasn't no, I fixed it though. A humdinger is a remarkable or outstanding person or thing of its kind.
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#4
Could be improved.
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#5
(09-20-2021, 08:34 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  Could be improved.

What could I do to improve my work?
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#6
(09-20-2021, 08:50 AM)Kerbonzo_beenz Wrote:  
(09-20-2021, 08:34 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  Could be improved.
What could I do to improve my work?
That we be a discussion more appropriate to the critical threads.
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