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Hellacious screams baster the drums of my ears.
Drifting farther out, venturing to new currents-- and I let them wash over me while my lungs draw air.
The world was just as it was, but before it wasn't.
I can't tell the difference anymore.
Surrealist and expansive; reality is now a banquet of lucidity.
Love has reached finality and comprehension has taken a dive.
Eyes loll in the darkness, and that's all there is now.
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Plural
Divination of corrabulous galvanized webbing
crusts the sanctum. My heart stabs it's victim
six times, seven, mighty jeans held up in stations.
If they only knew.
Queens seize, tightened grips and gaffolds
guffaw and dunk the fallacious trinkets.
The stars enlightening cranial lugnuts
hold tight.
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(09-18-2021, 08:36 AM)CRNDLSM Wrote: Plural
Divination of corrabulous galvanized webbing
crusts the sanctum. My heart stabs it's victim
six times, seven, mighty jeans held up in stations.
If they only knew.
Queens seize, tightened grips and gaffolds
guffaw and dunk the fallacious trinkets.
The stars enlightening cranial lugnuts
hold tight.
Look pall, don't patronize my work without even giving any good criticism.
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In miscellaneous:
Comments may also be simple appreciation, emotional responses, light banter or verse.
If you want critique you'll have to critique, it would also help to post in one of the critique forums, or ask for critique. I thought I was joining in your hallucinations.
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(09-18-2021, 09:23 AM)CRNDLSM Wrote: In miscellaneous:
Comments may also be simple appreciation, emotional responses, light banter or verse.
If you want critique you'll have to critique, it would also help to post in one of the critique forums, or ask for critique. I thought I was joining in your hallucinations.
Well, I am sorry. I thought you were being facetious. I'm very defensive about my work you know.
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Well no worries sometimes I'm a jerk, your work works, welcome to the pen, don't forget to leave others feedback
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Stagnant
if the world's folds molded in bulbous
rolls, the cylindrical dimension of ants
would glow orange in vengeance.
The clock is only moving mechanical parts,
The clock has more hands than most
I broke the mold and tossed it.
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