morning walk at kumrat valley
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morning walk at kumrat valley

the landscape’s transmutation is a function of light

     golden ochre horizon dappled on the uplands

the horses have been running for miles

     is it the hand of god coming down upon this glade

two boys walking across the landscape, naked

     take note of the smallness of their desire

out here, it is crushed by the magnitude of everything
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Nice one, I like the imagery especially: golden ochre horizon dappled on the uplands (well done here) also I liked also the hand of god coming down upon this glade (though hand of god is pretty abstract) what does this hand of god look like? it's colour? Smell? What? And what do you mean by everything? So far it reads well.
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I very much enjoyed reading this poem.  Punctuation (a little), capitalization, all that boring stuff, would make it more accessible to the reader, but I have no suggestions for changes to words as it seems a very good piece of work.  If anything, it's too brief.

p.s. what happened to "a short history of cinema". that was yours, right? I'd like to see it again.
"Poetry is the rhythmic, inevitably narrative, movement from an overclothed blindness to a naked vision."  Dylan Thomas
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