The Shebang (Abstact/Sound Poem)

[Torkelburger]

nonsense in Abstract/Sound form

The Shebang

A gang of orangutans
Hanged in the shebang
From the overhang they banged, clanged, and panged
And sang in slang.

[philip]

hello Torkelburger,

nice sonics in this ditty of course, although some of the word-choices come across as rather arbitrary.

the shebang - their shebang ?

panged - rang or swang ?

And sang in orangutan slang - to make it more immediate ?

cheers............P

[Torkelburger]

Thanks for the tips.

The Shebang

A gang of orangutans
Hanged in their shebang
From the overhang they banged, clanged, and rang
And sang in orangutan slang.

[Knot]

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Hi TB,
you say abstract, but ... you could read this as a group of orangutans were lynched for rowdy behaviour
(hanged doesn't offer much leeway in interpretation). Also, perhaps 'Buffoonery' for the title?


A shebang of orangutans
clanging from the overhang
...



Best, Knot



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[CRNDLSM]

Orangutans haranguing

[Torkelburger]

Thanks, Knot! Yeah, I think it was John Lennon who said something along the lines of how he sort of throws words together subconsciously and they usually find a meaning by the listener. Something like that, I believe.

Buffoonery

A shebang of orangutans
clanging from the overhang,
banged, clanged, and rang,
and sang in orangutan slang.