"Assamption."
#1
Night.
Frost.
Frozen silence
Fell on the earth.
I listen to crystal-clear
Stars jingling ...
Though,
It can be my teeth.
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#2
assamption is a word i'm struggling with.
though the poem itself works as humorous.
i like the last 4 lines if this Smile

thanks for the read ris.
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#3
Hi, Billy!
Thanks for reading and comment!
R.Y.
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#4
I confess i don't quite get the title as well... Blush

Like the poem itself, though. The only thing I wasn't fond of was "frost" and "frozen" put so close together since it made the adjective sound like a needless repetition... maybe another word that has similar meaning can be substituted. But overall very nice, and a quirky, unexpected ending to boot. Smile Thanks for the post
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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#5
Thanks, Addy, for kind comment!
Yes, Addy, you are right, but I'm not a professional and write for fun. Ha-ha!
Thanks, once more!
R.Y.
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