Nemo Resideo
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Nemo Risideo

Behind them
they imagine
the breath of God
at their six-

the moon waxes
with the bottle's wane
and they imagine the worst
is behind them

and behind them
are forty-seven days
of couch combat with the apocolypse
now on Netflix-

a weekend in Vegas
for the troops and their wives
shouldn't leave too, too many
behind.
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Well, well, well, then... no man left behind it is, though the current apocolypse has indeed left many behind.

The second and third stanzas resonate with me, while the first and fourth not as much.

That said, my favorite lines are:
" the moon waxes
with the bottle's wane"

Perhaps "while" instead of "with" ?  I'm sure sure you wrestled those lines already, so I'll just drink it in as presented.

Interesting take on our current situation...

Thanks,
Mark
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(04-30-2020, 06:13 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote:  Well, well, well, then... no man left behind it is, though the current apocolypse has indeed left many behind.

The second and third stanzas resonate with me, while the first and fourth not as much.

That said, my favorite lines are:
" the moon waxes
with the bottle's wane"

Perhaps "while" instead of "with" ?  I'm sure sure you wrestled those lines already, so I'll just drink it in as presented.

Interesting take on our current situation...

Thanks,
Mark
Thanks Mark. It is bewildering to me that a country so in love with its troops cannot muster 2 months of common sense without going AWOL. If I were History, I wouldn't look too kindly on us.
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