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[Tiger the Lion]

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The first time Mandela died
we were seventeen and drunk;

me on you and you on me
and both of us drunk
on a spirit only seventeen
could distill.

And there was still oceans 
of it.

And there are still oceans
of it
we cannot remember

now we are sober.

[Todd]

I really like this. Fantastic opening lines! I think it holds together to the end.

Best,

Todd

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The first time Mandela died
we were seventeen and drunk;

me on you and you on me
and both of us drunk
on a spirit only seventeen
could distill.

And there was still oceans 
of it.

And there are still oceans
of it
we cannot remember

now we are sober.

[busker]

“Was” or “were”?
In my head, the read the of the lines without the “of it” and it sounds - maybe not better, but different. And I like it.
Lovely work

[Tiger the Lion]

Thanks Todd. The opening was originally part of the title. It's better as an opening line but left my title wanting.
@ Busker - I changed what to were and back again a number of times. At this point they both sound wrong. I'll sit on it awhile.
Thanks for the reads guys,
Paul

[cloud]

dope.
nostalgiaaa .
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I really like this